Rengasdengklok happens on 16 August 1945, Soekarno and Hatta bring to Rengasdengklok to hasten reading proklamasi. Soekarno and Hatta reading the proclamation on Friday, 17 August 1945 in Ikada Iquare and finally to read in Ir. Soekarno's home in Street Pengangsaan Timur no.56 Jakarta because, in Ikada Square Jepang stand guard there. Achmad Soebardjo pick up Ir. Soekarno, Hatta, Fatmawati, and Guntur go to Jakarta and read the text proklamasi. On 17 August 1945 text proclamation is really to read.
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Nice story👍
BalasHapusHi Arlita, good writing. However, there are some mistakes and you should to revise it. First, in the sentence of " Rengasdengklok happen..." the word happen should be "happens". Second the word "proklamasi", you can make it into "proclamation". Third, in the sentence of "on friday, 17 August 1945 in ikada square", remember the capital letters for the using of name of day, and place. So, it should be "on Friday... in Ikada Square". Fourth, in the sentence of "in street pengangsaan timur no.56 jakarta because, in ikada square...". Remember about he use of capital letter again, it should be in Street Pegangsaan Timur No.56 Jakarta, in Ikada...". Fifth, in the sentence of "On 17 August 1945 text proklamasi really to read", let's thinking about to be, on your sentence there is no to be "On 17 August 1945 text proklamasi is really to read"
BalasHapusThat's all, enjoy to edit your Draft I, and please make it Draft I (Edited) if you finish to edit and share your edited draft I on your blog account. Once again please make DRAFT II, I'll be waiting your DRAFT II. :)
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Hapus